I feel it is only right I rip into my own work just as I did earlier with work of others. So here is a personal animated short movie of mine from 2009 and critique for it.
I made the animated short Flight or Fight in spring 2009. It was a technical exercise that got out of hand, big time. It goes against what I recommend, to begin with I had no story to tell. You can read about the production process here, a sort of an making of. I’m a bit ashamed to show this short for it is anything but my best work, but having said many times that I’ve learned by doing I think I am obliged to show this, too, as I learned so much from it.
I will judge the animation on how it achieves the illusion of life, or not – following the animation principles which I wrote about here.
Story takes place underwater. One of the top animators in game industry told me, kindly, that it was an extremely silly choice – very hard animate.
Underwater setting provides water resistance which acts like a brake and a force, both at once. It will have effect on Dynamics, Balance, Follow Through and in small ways pretty much everything else. In short it will make the animation look floaty, artificial, which is a problem already with normal 3D animation and underwater setting only adds to it.
|IMPRESSION||PROBLEM AREA DEFINED|
|All animation seems to forget water resistance except when convinient. Underwater, especially with any type of current, holding balance and staying still would take far more of an effort than shown here. Moves are also too effortless and he Fishman stays on the bottom like glue when he wants to and he sinks too fast.||Dynamics, Dynamic Balance, Anticipation|
|Fishman movements lack fluidity, the round flowing feel and and up’n down and side to side movement you’d expect from underwater motion.||Arcs, Variance, Anticipation|
|Fish movements in particular lack weight and strenght – the speed and acceleration and decelartion is not quite right.||Dynamic, Anticipation, Arcs, Timing|
|Neither character changes their volume in motion. Lack thereof is best seen where the fish is caught under the big root and fights free.||Squash and Stretch|
In addition to the above, my animation has acting problems. The fisman doesn’t convey his thoughts well enough. Stronger poses and better timing would help – and really better acting, too.
Regardkess of the short not meeting my standards in animation, I’m quite happy with it as a technical achievement – that I got it done despite the problems. The colours are nice too and the mood works sometimes. Of course the most important thing is I learned a lot.
What about you – any production experiences to share, or anything related? Feel free to write below.